today I saw some blue
dancing across the sky
spinning and twirling
a tango with the clouds
today the dance is over
the blue has left the sky
and gray controls all
the only blue is mood
it is hard to feel joy
or thrill about the day
with cold and dark
the atmosphere I see
I miss the spring
that teased so shortly
I know it went away
I watched geese fly south.....
I'd love to see more colorful words in that morose third stanza instead of mundane words. The dancing in the first two stanzas works well, as does the teasing in the fourth with the geese...anyone, just a thought. The depressive part of me kinda likes it, though, overall.
ReplyDelete